水木艾迪06考研英语作文冲刺-评分档次评析

例5：

As seen from the above picture, an American girl in traditional Chinese costume is smiling to us with friendly looking. There are a lot of bright and beautiful accessories on her body. She dresses in Chinese costume, which is a symbol on behalf of the minority people in our country. From the picture we can draw a conclusion that cul­tures are national and international, and no limit between different countries. Even if growing up in various countries, we have still the same interests in cultures, not only in America, but also other coun­tries.

In my view, it is no exaggeration to say that cultures are the most important factor, which can make the mankind progress and benefit a great deal from the communication in cultures, other than economic development. I am of the opinion that, in reaction to the phenomenon of cultures tending to be national and international, China should hold the key to success in the 21st century both in economy and cultures. We are required by the world people to open our cultures. Only in this situation can China act in cultures as an important role in the world stage. Of course, faced with the entry in foreign cultures, we must take steps to keep up the alertness against bad minds. My argument to the point is that we can’t throw the baby away with the bath water.(230 words )

这篇短文内容切题，基本包括题中所列的内容，也基本清楚地表达其内涵。但句子结构和用词有少量错误，有些地方词汇搭配不当，文字也不精炼。文章长度符合要求。

第五档次文章 (1——4分)：

例6 ：

In this picture an American girl in traditional Chinese costume is smiling to me, flower circling her head and Chinese Changming lock in her chest.

Lovely girl and lovely Chinese traditional costume make me thi­nk. China has many treasures, traditional costume, traditional cul­ture and so on. In its long history it beared excellent culture, beau­tiful scene and advanced mind. We have the excellent traditional cul­ture. Today it belongs to us Chinese and it belong to the world. China need world, the world need China. (84 words )

这篇小短文虽然基本按要求写作，但是无结构、无明显主题。内容表达混乱，句子与句子之间不连贯，而且严重受汉语表达习惯影响。词汇搭配不当，词汇量很小，表达不清楚。并且有很多语法错误。写作长度不符合要求。只有少数句子可理解。

例7：

The American girl who in traditional Chinese costume is very lovely, and she is fit for the clothes. May lie somebody would think that she is a Chinese girl.

Any countries has their own national costume, and almost of these costume are very beautiful, perhaps, some of them can be say "project!"

So our cultures went countries, we happy see it. We happy also see their culture in China. So we loved that all. (74 words )

这根本算不上什么短文，而仅仅是把一些不连贯的句子拼凑在一起，有很多语法错误，只有极少数句子可理解。写作长度根本谈不上符合要求。无主题思想。