恩波《考研英语考前30天狂背作文》下载十一

Direction 30
Study the following drawing carefully and write an essay in which you should
1) describe the drawing，
2) give possible reasons for the phenomenon, and
3) suggest possible solutions for the problem.
You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.

审题：
　　该文提纲可分为三个部分：描述图画；给出图画所表现的现象的原因；给出解决问题的办法。这是一种非常常见的文章模式。在提纲中直接给出主题的情况不多，如果没有给出，就应该在第一段或第二段开头明确地点出来。图画题一般有两种情况，一种是平铺直叙，直接写图画反映的问题或现象；一种是含义深刻，简洁的图画中蕴涵着深刻的道理。一般来说，后者的难度较高。这里属于前一种情况。

Sample:
In the picture, we can see clearly that two small children are showing off their father’s business cards. One says proudly, “My father is the manager of his department.” And the other immediately laughs at him and utters, “Oh, that’s nothing. My father is the CEO of a multinational corporation.”
The reasons why such a worrying phenomenon arises, in my belief, are as follows. First, in the social transformation period, some people pay more and more attention to wealth and status, and link success to such superficial factors, thus making a destructive compact on children. Second, today’s media, to some extent, have actually aggravated such an unfavorable situation. In films and TV series a happy and ideal life is often depicted as a luxurious one, which will inevitably have an adverse effect on young people who are still not mature enough to distinguish between right and wrong. Third, teachers, on many occasions, have not done a satisfactory job. The present education system sometimes attaches too much attention to the scores and grades of students and overlooks their personality development.
To change the present unfavorable situation all of us must make immediate and substantial efforts. The government should try it best to create a social atmosphere in which people cherish diligence, conscience and simplicity. Teachers and schools should make every effort to teach the students to grow up into responsible and enterprising citizens who are determined to contribute to the development of the community, the nation and the whole world. Parents should let students get in touch with the society, helping them know that a meaningful life is one that brings significance to others. Only in this way can we hope to solve such a disturbing problem and ensure the brilliant future of our nation.

点评：
　　该文共分三段。第一段描述图画。一般说来，先描述图画，后点明主题的情形比较多——这样写重在归纳，比较重视逻辑和事物发展的内部联系。而本文首句即点明主题，即本文所述的现象——孩子吹嘘父亲职位、相互攀比的现象——这样写开门见山，非常有力度。

　　第二段写了该现象产生的原因。第一句话是段落的主题句，而后分社会、媒体和老师三个方面来说。
第三段写解决问题的办法，第一句话是主题句，之后分别写政府、老师和家长正确的做法。这里没有使用象first,second,third这样的连接词，但由于采用了平行的主语，仍达到了结构清晰的效果。最后一句话是结论句，使用了强势的倒装句，句中使用了连词and，前面写“解决问题”，正好与提纲相扣，后面写“保证国家的美好明天”，是升华的部分，请大家用心体会末句的写法。

心得：
　　第二段与第三段均分三点来写，其中两点严格呼应，另一点并未严格呼应（家长）。这是平行之间见变化的高级写法，即两点是显性呼应，一点是隐性呼应。